Comments on: The Son of His Father – Chapter 1 (once again)

By: Soapb

Soapb — Mon, 10 Mar 2008 13:03:06 +0000

Great start.

Nah, I’m not waiting. It’ll come when it comes. Whenever you’re ready. No tapping of the foot here. When it happens, I’ll be ready. You know what I mean? No pressure.

Besides, you already know it’s there (you know you do), so let it flow and edit later (but you already know that, too).

By: Deb (Missives From Suburbia)

Deb (Missives From Suburbia) — Mon, 10 Mar 2008 03:05:05 +0000

Great post! Nice blog! Funny!

Well… shoot… I had to use it sometime, right?

I’m with PITS. Your voice, my dear. Use your voice. Otherwise, I like it, and I’m waiting for more.

By: danleone

danleone — Sun, 09 Mar 2008 13:47:15 +0000

PiTs – trust me, I call you are writer. Thank you!

Jodi – Some am I…so am I.

By: Jodi

Jodi — Sun, 09 Mar 2008 13:31:44 +0000

……waiting

By: People in the Sun

People in the Sun — Sun, 09 Mar 2008 05:25:10 +0000

I’m sure there is a chapter 2. That was fun. What’s the story about? Growing up stubbornly American in a place that refuses to let go of its heritage? Something like that? And you have to realize that even if you don’t have a chapter 2, your own unique voice will make the story.

I mean, look at the paragraph about your name, before the chapter. Just my opinion, but I think a writer who wanted to incorporate this paragraph into a “serious” book could be easily tempted to rewrite it in a more literary-acceptable way, whatever that means. But the truth is that this paragraph is perfect as it is because your true voice comes out, and the story of your childhood is not just about facts and innocent observations, but also about the creation of your voice. Know what I mean?

What do I know? I’m not a writer. I do data-entry. Not much creativity in that.